創作宋詞 - 神魔之塔
By Noah
at 2015-01-15T21:14
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原文恕刪
［浣溪沙］最強手遊
希臘強權和北歐， (中仄中平中仄平)
遊俠龍獸五西遊， (中平中仄仄平平)
神轉疊珠樂悠悠。 (中平中仄仄平平)
不朽之槍攻地獄， (中仄中平平仄仄)
昇華潛解聚相謀， (中平中仄仄平平)
首儲還有送石頭。 (中平中仄仄平平)
不專業點評：
1. 四字出律，可能會被老師扣不少分。
2. 魔族呢？老師假如main小八隊會很生氣滴！！！
3. 最後，副題跟內容關係不大啊！要寫出「最強」在何處，否則文不對題，也會失分唷
^_<
( 注：本文詞牌參考龍榆生《唐宋詞格律》)
--
時代像篩子，篩得每一個人流離失所，篩得少數人出類拔萃。
王鼎鈞〈一方陽光〉
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［浣溪沙］最強手遊
希臘強權和北歐， (中仄中平中仄平)
遊俠龍獸五西遊， (中平中仄仄平平)
神轉疊珠樂悠悠。 (中平中仄仄平平)
不朽之槍攻地獄， (中仄中平平仄仄)
昇華潛解聚相謀， (中平中仄仄平平)
首儲還有送石頭。 (中平中仄仄平平)
不專業點評：
1. 四字出律，可能會被老師扣不少分。
2. 魔族呢？老師假如main小八隊會很生氣滴！！！
3. 最後，副題跟內容關係不大啊！要寫出「最強」在何處，否則文不對題，也會失分唷
^_<
( 注：本文詞牌參考龍榆生《唐宋詞格律》)
--
時代像篩子，篩得每一個人流離失所，篩得少數人出類拔萃。
王鼎鈞〈一方陽光〉
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